
KONY 2012 AUGMENTATIVE ESSAY
I believed in KONY a bit when I first saw it, despite all the demotivational posters and criticism it got, but unlike some people, I didn't believe it all the way. I did some research before getting heated up on the issue, and found that only 31% actually go to the real cause. This is because the group, "Invisible Children" uses it for other uses. Other uses that include but are not limited to; lining the pockets of the three people in charge of the operation, pay for their traveling expenses, and funds their film-making business. Although 31% is actually a quite big sum of money, considering a lot of people have donated, but there are so many other way to help them more directly and more efficiently, such as donating to organizations such as "Save the Children", or "Doctors Without Borders" etc. They should be true to what they stated in the video. The second reason is that KONY 2012 is in favor of a direct military intervention. I do not support this, because the U.S. is already involved. Not only that, Kony is already pushed out of Uganda. I believe this is something like the 9/11 event, when people demanded troops sent to Iraq. This eventually turned into a war for oil, not to fight terrorism.
The final reason is that most people don't really know anything about the cause, and they just jump in the bandwagon because of two reasons; their friends are doing it, or they really just believe whatever YouTube tells them. For their information, there are not thousands of children in his resistance army, but in fact, there are only 250 soldiers. (in March of 2012) Also, to get to Kony, you'd have to kill some of his army, which includes children. Kony was not active in Uganda for six years, and is instead active in other surrounding countries. Additionally, I really don't think that forwarding a video makes one an activist. Before one believes information provided by YouTube or such and getting swept up by a new trend or fad, they should at least research a bit.

Excellent! Well written structure and arguments. Nice tone. Very persuasive.
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